Writing - Personal voice

Today, we looked again at how to add personal voice by "showing" our feelings in our writing.

Here are some examples:

The party was in full swing. All of a sudden the door flew open. In the doorway was a chimpanzee holding an ice cream. My eyes grew wide and I dropped my present. I suddenly shouted out loud, "Oh my gosh, where's a banana."

Cate

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The party was in full swing. All of a sudden the door flew open. In the doorway was Benny Tipene. "Oh my gosh! Mum, you're the best getting Benny Tipene here.This is the best birthday ever." I exclaimed

Paityn

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The party was in full swing. All of a sudden the door flew open. In the doorway was Mr Davidson in a batman suit. Omg, it is Mr D at my party. I screamed like a baby. This is the best birthday. I threw my hands in the air.

Luukas

Inquiry - Face the music

We are learning the cup song in our class as part of our inquiry. Some of the children in our class already know the song  and actions well so they have become the teachers and have taught the other class members how to do it.

Here is a video of the cup song.

Instructions for The Cup Song

For this technique you need a plastic cup (red solo cups work well but any plastic cup will do).  It sounds the best if you do it on a surface with fabric on it.

• Start with the cup sitting upside down on the table.
• Clap your hands 2 times.
• Hit the bottom of the cup 3 times (Right, Left, Right).
• Clap your hands 1 time.
• Pick up the cup and set it down.
• Clap your hands 1 time.
• Turn your left hand over to pick the cup up.
• Hit the top of the cup with your right hand.
• Hit the bottom edge of the cup onto the table.
• Switch the cup from your left hand to your right hand.
• Tap the table with your free left hand.
• Place the cup down with your right hand.

Repeat until the song is over.

Writing - Adding feeling to our writing

For writing, we are looking at adding feeling to give stronger personal voice. We are learning to "show" the feeling rather than "tell" the feeling.
There are different ways we could show feeling in our writing:
- Simply state it
- Use an action
- Use a description
- Use dialogue.

We watched a video about Verruckt, the worlds highest water slide. We were given the starter sentence and then had to show how we felt using an action, description or dialogue.

Here are a few examples from our class:

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We got to the top of Verruckt. I looked down. My heart sank as I started breathing heavily. "I'm not going down". I started to be sick as I looked down again. I didn't believe in myself. "I can't do it," I told myself.

Anna

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We got to the top of Verruckt. I looked down. The moment I got to the edge of the water slide, I felt like fainting. My heart started pounding really fast. I felt like I was going to spew.

Annalena

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We got to the top of Verruckt. I looked down. My heart was beating. I couldn't breathe. I froze. It looked like it was over the sky. I couldn't believe my eyes.

I hopped on. Woosh! I went off. I was shaking to death. I'm going down. Ahhh! My face went pale.

Sam

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We got to the top of Verruckt. I looked down. "Awesome, I can't wait," I shouted.

Jordan