Here are some examples:
The party was in full swing. All of a sudden the door flew open. In the doorway was a chimpanzee holding an ice cream. My eyes grew wide and I dropped my present. I suddenly shouted out loud, "Oh my gosh, where's a banana."
Cate
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The party was in full swing. All of a sudden the door flew open. In the doorway was Benny Tipene. "Oh my gosh! Mum, you're the best getting Benny Tipene here.This is the best birthday ever." I exclaimed
Paityn
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The party was in full swing. All of a sudden the door flew open. In the doorway was Mr Davidson in a batman suit. Omg, it is Mr D at my party. I screamed like a baby. This is the best birthday. I threw my hands in the air.
Luukas
Really funny and amazing writing. I wish I could be as good as you. - Holly from Miss Kriechbaum's class in London.
ReplyDeleteVery Funny Luukas! You must love Mr. Davidson!
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To:Cate, I love your comment it's awesome and youare the best blogger in NZ!
ReplyDeleteI really liked all of the examples but the one that really stood out was Luukas' with the end where he wrote ''I threw my hands in the air.'' It also rhymed a bit. Cate's was also quite funny with the chimpanzee, the ice-cream, Cate and the bananas.
ReplyDeleteTo Cate I really liked how you showed that you were suprided and you had some really funny words in it. You have a really strong imagination Cate. The chimpanzee was HILARIOUS.
ReplyDeleteTO LUUKAS:omg your blog is epic and i want to hear more and i think Dr D is omg so brillant
ReplyDeleteWell done Luuk
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